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Desolate

Desolate

Through the torment of heartbreak, its relenting grip wouldn't release
It had bound her emotional state from freeing herself from him
He had walked away, disregarded her after his seduction had won her over
and where charm had succeeded, having her had cured his wantΒ 
He had left her an ongoing curse of disbelief as innocence was taken
As her tears ran rampant, the feeling of emptiness consumed her
Her love for him had been overshadowed by lies, deceit had finally won
His charm had brought a forecast of rugged, cold had replaced the warmth
and in giving herself to him something new had found its claim which left her
desolate.

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Richard Waters

DESOLATION. ISOLATION. DECORATION. IT, HELPS. Obviously.Β  :)

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Susan Chetcuti

Thanks, the picture drew me to her and I just had to write about what I saw in her emotion?

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Tina Brown

​​​​​​Beautiful work!☺
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Tina Brown

Beauty isΒ in the eyes of the beholder...and I am the beholder...
beautifully done!
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Tony Taylor

My Goodness SUSAN!!......you can really feel the pain of abandonment in these most poetically delivered lines ~

Β  Β  Β  Β  Β  Β  Β  Β  Β  Β  ~ "Cold had replaced the warmth
Β  Β  Β  Β  Β  Β  Β  Β  Β  Β  Β  Β  And in giving herself to him
Β  Β  Β  Β  Β  Β  Β  Β  Β  Β  Β Β  Something new had found its claim
Β  Β  Β  Β  Β  Β  Β  Β  Β  Β  Β Β  Which left her ~ Desolate.."

There's something haunting about the tone that your phrasing creates in this piece.....It REALLY packs a punch....at least it did for me....Man Oh Man!!.....Relationships are such food for the soul.....and the heart of pain and happiness alike!!.......ALL STARS!!......great stuff dear poet sister!!....LOVE & ROCKETS!!......T xoΒ  : )
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Susan Chetcuti

Thanks Tony, your kind words are always appreciated.?

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Being Me

Awww...so sad. Heartbreak is so very painful and you have expressed the emotional wreckage it leaves behind in this fabulous write x

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Nine Eleven

His charm had brought a forecast of rugged

I just love this line, the whole poem is so sad yet such a treat to read.

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