I Died Inside
I observed orange embers glowing as the fires flame was slowing
in the morning she’d be going–going off to find true love.
All the while I can’t help crying–something in me surely dying;
wasn’t our love still worth trying? It’s her face I’m dreaming of.
Cards, it seems, were stacked against us; was our love merely fictitious?
Oh, sweet nectar, so delicious–delicious as bees’ honeycomb.
Now the taste has gotten bitter; stars still shine but do not glitter.
Ah, alas, I did permit her to depart our humble home.
Tears stream down our cheeks in knowing lifeblood of our love quit flowing.
She looked back, her visage glowing, as she said her last Good-byes.
"At the risk of sounding sappy, please, my sweet, always be happy;"
She turned ‘round, one last look at me; that's when all within me dies.
I can’t help but sit and wonder as my heartbeat pounds like thunder
why my heart was cast asunder–now as black as lumps of coal.
Turned to stone, it lies here waiting in my chest whilst I’m creating
walls of ice built, thus debating–will my soul again feel whole?
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Comments
Wow! I can feel the pain... well written.
Thanks very much for reading, Lori.
I sincerely appreciate you dropping by to comment on this.
Hugs❣
~Dean ♥?♥
This piece gave me chills... it is truly heartbreaking and I fully understand where you are coming from, it is devastating. In a second you are an empty shell because your soul/spirit leaves as the one you love just did...
"Beauty Always Comes With Dark Thoughts" and dark experiences bring those thoughts forward and you have made them into a masterpiece.
Thanks, Whispering Dream. I take your comments as the highest of compliments.
Whether delivering chills through romantic poetry or shivers with the darker writing, it's always nice to know something you've written has elicited a response from a reader.
I deeply appreciate it!
~Dean
Stunningly well crafted!!..... Beautifully sad!!....... and the poetic melancholy here..... is VERY well delivered.... leaving me to feel the strength from which this was written!!..... only a VERY sensitive soul could write these words!!........PINNED!!.......smokin' grooves brother!!.....smokin' grooves!!.........T xo ???✴❤❤✴????
Hello Dean...
Sometimes, we don't see the signs...
Maybe, we don't want to...
But, if there's a spark left there's hope...
Communication and listening is key...
Some people forget that no one's perfect...
I have heard people say they've changed...
They're not the person I fell in love with...
Of course there's going to be change...
Another key is as long as there's a spark stay out of the rut...
Forgiveness can also be tested...
Great and sad write!
Thank you for sharing...
Hugs...
sparrowsong
You see, that's what bothers me still, to this very day, about my marriage break-up, Sparrowsong.
My wife and I got along great. Not a day went by that we didn't tell each other "I love you." We went out together, dancing, dining, etc.
One "date"she got to pick and the next was my turn.
We had a fabulous time together.
We were and had always been intimate over the course of our entire marriage, right up until the day she left.
So, if there were signs, even subtle ones, I could understand.
But that's just not the case.
I was blindsided by what felt like a Peter Built semi truck hitting me fully loaded head on while speeding down the highway.
It caught me completely off guard.
In fact, her family, as well as my own, were just as stunned as I was.
I still communicate with her family. They are good people and still consider me a part of their family.
I'm very grateful for that.
~Dean
Hello Dean...
That's the worse...
No explanation and no one had any answers...
I'm very sorry you went through that...
Hugs again...
Aww I'm sure you'll find Havana. The joys of the wilderness. We get lost in our own thorns.