Poem -
Illusive Night
Night
Who brings those spectral memories into clear sight
Where I might slip into the embodiment of wishful dreams
Dreams that can never truly contrive into anything more
than a mere translucent effigy
The imprint of what was once so tangible and real
Yet still my mind persists to try and see
What was, yet shall now never be
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Wow what a wonderful poem
I love it
Thanks so much my friend, you are always so very kind x
Captured perfectly , so relatable as there are mornings I wake up disapointed, realizing .... it was all a dream. The ending sums this up so perfectly .
Wow thanks so much Rob, so sorry you can relate. Thanks for stopping by and commenting
Gwen x
I get overwhelming yearning and sadness and yes...not acceptance because we both know that can never be, but of defeat. It defeats us Gwen untill we are forced to accept defeat but never the loss. It is exhausting and never ending and I'm sending all my live because your words are magnificent ❤
Defeat is a good word my friend. I think to start it's all denial, and then reality hits and you are forced to accept there is nothing left of them. Not here in this now moment anyway
Hugs xx❤
A STUNNER Miss GWEN!!......so succinctly delivered that it packs more of a wallop.......to dive into this subject matter......to find the magic.....to haunt us with the truth of it all.....is an extraordinary accomplishment in this art form!! ~
~ "What was, yet shall now never be."
WOW!!....you my friend.....are a force to be reckoned with!!......PINNED for perfection!!......Bravo!......LOVE & ROCKETS!!......T xo : )
Haunting truth...more good words shared. Thank you T for always giving insightful commentary on my poetry. Never is it overlooked, so grateful to always hear your amazing thoughts
many thanks my friend, and I hope you are well
Gwen x
Quite possibly one of the most touching of mourning songs/poems that I have personally read in a very long time Gwen .. I both salute you & thank you for sharing it here .. N x
Wowsers Neville, you are too kind my friend. Thank you for this lovely comment which means a lot
Gwen x
Dang .. on popping back for a second helping, I just noticed I did not like, pin or star .................. now rectified .. I shall wear my horse hair pants & vest beneath my pyjamas tonight in penance .. x
Wow Neville you. Came back for a second read! Gosh my friend please don’t feel bad for forgetting things. Thanks so much for being so very kind and reading my poems. Please don’t torture yourself on my behalf, though you did make me giggle lol 😂 x
giggle eh .. you wanna try it :) x
This poem has it all. Your choice of words is always sublime. The tempo of this poem has a sharpness to it which, in my eyes, compliments the subject perfectly. The flow is excellent too. And then there is something else — the poem makes total sense straight off to any reader and the word choice, tempo and flow and sharpness helps this to be. Nothing is stilted with this poem, not that any of yours are, it pours straight into your reader's heart and soul. A beautiful, beautiful poem. I love it x
Thanks for this wonderful feedback Tina, you are always so generous with your words and time given to everyone here on Cosmo. This was one of those poems that just spills out suddenly. So thrilled you enjoyed it my friend x
When dreams meet reality makes me think. Nice one.
Yiyan,
Many thanks for stopping by and leaving your kind words with my poem. So happy you liked it.Thanks for your wonderful, insightful feedback
Gwen x
rocket not going up
canncled it agin
maybe tomorrow
Again 😩
thanks for letting me know, let’s hope tomorrow is better for them. Been looking forward to this one
Hope your day has gone well my friend x
So soulful it calls for tears.
So truthful it has a message loud and clear.
Somehow you made misery quietly beautiful.
Like a praying child like Jenny in Forest Gump.
Wow thank you Liliana for such a beautifully poetic response. Truly lovely words. I remember Jenny x
Oh loneliness, oh hopelessness.
Great write Gwen hauntingly purveyed with forlorn and melancholy in equal measure.
And also beautiful in it's beat and flow, one where it hits the poetry ground running right off the bat and not a word out of place or misused to trip it up.
A perfect paced and written poem and a beautiful read.
Poetry hats off to you and apologies for being late.
Thank you for writing a poem that reaches out to captivate and be enthralled.
The only way you write and more than magically so.
Take care my friend and wishing you well,
Shaun x
Thanks for your kind words Shaun, they are always valued and you are never too late my friend. Hope your weekend is going well
Gwen x
My Dear Gwen,
Your beautiful words bring tears to my eyes for the only time now that I am able to hold my Precious Angels is in dreams, that all too quickly end, and I wake up with empty arms.
Love,
Larry xxx
Hello Larry, sorry for the late reply. So lovely of you to read my poem and leave such words. Sorry for your loss, that you find yourself wishful dreaming also. If only we could manifest our dreams into waking life x
" What was, yet shall never will be"
my favourite line...
Great write.. yes, we can't change the ' WRITTE FATE' what is meant to happen, will happen....
Hello Leah, sorry for late reply, mummy duties called.
Thank you for your insightful feedback to this piece. Always appreciated x
Once again you spin your words beautifully
Thanks JP, that means a lot :)
Oh Gwen I read this and I knew exactly what you felt. There is so much power and wisdom in your lines and it works so beautifully when read. Its short and sharp and takes you right there....and the last line says it all. This is why you fast became one of my favourite, inspiring poets....your writes are so elegant and pure and whenever I read your poems you transport us there. Utterly surreal. Big fan here. Pxxx
Hello P, it is always lovely to find you have stopped by my friend. Thank you for your kind words and support. You are always so very giving towards others. I am so grateful to call you a friend
Gwen xxx