Poem -
Perseus
Had I a heroβs steel-distempered stare
and not a daunted gaze perturbed by mote
Would I be wrapped in you ~ and not a coat
of darkness (nothing) hanging in the air?
A blade; entrusted to Atheneβs care:
would kiss the sinews of your tendered throat
A Gorgon rendered as a sacred goat
her godhead and her womanhood laid bare.
No blade for me. But withΒ adamant pen
Iβll cleave the equine wings of fleeting verse
And there enfold us both in ancient tome
Wherein Iβll trace your sinews once again
As you; no longer distant, grim or terse:
Caress the gentle contours of my poem.
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Comments
Such a beautiful sonnet Jason, these lines are my personal favourites you have broken down the walls of the tale and rebuilt it. it has such a sensual feel to it...I love it, it is truly stunning.
I love all of you poetry, but this is my favourite so far!
Lorna xx
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Thanks Lorna...that's really lovely of you to say.
I'm a big fan of your work to...as you know.
J xxx
Excellent as always...thx
Thanks Lorris.
J ;)
gorgeous ink J.
your fan always, LisaΒ
As I am yours...
Thanks Lisa.
J xxx
Beautifully written Jason....I think the Petrarchan style really accentuates the piece.Β
Although a Mythical fable ....I can't help but feel its personal also.
Mick.
Mick...
You have the eyes of an eagle and the learned sagacity of an owl (who also have pretty sharp eyes, now that I think about it).
You're right, of course...this is personal. But then; on some level: isn't everything we write??
Thanks.
J ;)
My Dear Friend Jason,
The gasp of the asp aspires no more
The evil has dissipated too
No longer your fate in History's store
We are free to love each very true
So I trade now my sword for the tip of my quill
I write words you may softly peruse
Caress them with truth and know of my will
That my love you never shall lose
Peace and Love,
Larry xxx
My dear Larry,
I'm not sure which came first; the egg of your unerring ability to see a series of images and ideas and concentrateΒ them in a tight, elegant poetic formation...or the chicken of your haiku-writing: it's unclear which lead to which. Perhaps it's a case of postΒ hoc ergo propter hoc??
Whichever it is...you see with a clear eye and write with a clear pen. I love this line:
Surely, at this point, it's redundant of me to suggest the obvious...but suggest it I shall, nonetheless; please post this piece on your own page...if only for the sake of...
your friend & fan,
J ;)
My Dear Friend Jason,
I wrote this specifically for you, because you were it's inspiration. Β I almost feel that by taking credit for it's foundation, which was totally your creation, it would be a form of plagiarism. Β I thank you so much for honoring me with those thoughts.
Peace and Love,
Larry xxx