Poem -
Salt
Going the distance.
Pain and persistence.
Pull away from the stage.
With a spongy resistance.
Promote,
Provoke,
I`m sorry I spoke,
Just keeping you positive,
And giving you hope.
Do you cope?
I quote,
“That’s all she wrote”
The puzzling pleasure,
Of lying, make note.
Salt lakes cities get caught up.
Nitty and gritty, all stuck.
And mountains made of land mines.
In forgotten fields.
In a forgotten time.
As Lead balloons rise.
Breath in the fumes.
While oceans evaporate.
And the protesters demonstrate.
That the salt is left behind.
The Fish of the Sea.
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Comments
Hey Max, another great journey of a write to reflect on our inner soul and mirrored in the world around one and all.
And with more than a tad of positivity and hope woven in for good measure.
A thought provoker and for all the right reasons, human emotional reasons and issues going on outside our fragile, insulated bubble in today's world and surrounding environment.
Thanks for writing and sharing and for making me pause and to reflect.
Got some catching up to do but will get there.
I wish you well Max and hang in there my friend.
Shaun.
Ahhh thanks so much Shaun! To be honest, this one is probably a work in progress, been so busy with the competition outside Cosmos, but I thought I should post something! Glad you for meaning and my intent in this one. Although I know I don't always hit the mark! Thanks so much for your support as always. Your friend and Fish fan. Max
Max the five stars function is playing up.
Looks like the Cosmo donkey has finally caught up with the carrot and grounded to a halt.
Will try again tomorrow for I pinned it.
Thanks again my friend.
No problem Shaun! Happens all the time... :/
Interesting Max. Speaks to me of the tiresome struggles of just...'being'
Of just surviving...us and the planet. Could be way off though. Enjoyed the write Max x
Ahhh thanks, Marion! Yes, life does seem like a struggle nowadays! But at least we have cosmo am I right? ;) Thank you for your support, Marion. As always, wishing you peace and smiles my friend. Max~
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Thanks Jill!
great race track in that pic!
Ahhh, I never thought about it that way Jim! XD, your exactly right!
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Max, what can I say this was a great read. I particularly enjoyed the rhyming and rhythm of the second and third stanzas 😍 seriously good stuff! I could feel a beat to that, and the words roll around the tongue fabulously. As for the subject matter. Again WOW you are making the reader reflect on themselves and the planet. A mirror of each and so well penned. If this past year has taught us anything as a planet. It’s just how much we humans effect it negatively. I am super pleased I thought to check if you had left us all a poem
I hope all goes well with the competition
your friend Gwen :)
Awww thanks, Gwen! I know it's not my best work, but I thought I should write something other than my work for the contest! To keep a fresh mind and all. Although as another poet once said to me "Poems are like farts, if you force them they are usually S**t!" Lol, To be honest, I was just trying some new analogies and wordplay out. But glad you enjoyed it! And yes, seems like climate change is becoming more of a topic these days than ever... devastating... Thank you for taking the time Gwen, to purposely go back and read my work XD. My competition poetry is going swimmingly!! And If I don't win, I`m planning to post my 5 poems (for the comp) in a poetry album on Cosmos! Dubbed "Under the waves." So I guess win-win either way!!! Again thanks so much for your support. Hope to catch up soon. Your friend, Max
Max, five deserved stars now delivered my friend.
Thanks, Shaun!! Your too kind ;)
An interesting write that really pulls the reader in! Fabulous 👏👏👏👏 x
Awww thanks Tina! Glad you liked it ;). Hopefully, more coming soon!!
This is really good, I love it, it has everything a good poem needs, and more,
Brilliant.
Thanks so much! Tried to experiment a bit with my phrases in this one. I'm really glad you liked it Gerard! Keep being awesome. Hope to catch up soon!
really good shit my friend!
Ahhh thanks Greg! Glad you liked it.