Smokey Stars
The dusty stars glisten in smokey skies
Hanging just like perfections sweetest dream.
Bringing smiles that (for him only) will beam,
confidence now to break unwanted ties.
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Seeing sparks, that truly light coldest ground.
On much concealed darkness of the bleak earth,
Giving depth to feeling, she has more worth!
Love falls without first any single sound.
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The dust that drowns in heavens, emerges
Falls quickly, but not nearly soon enough!
Yet, the stars are seemingly not so tough,
Longing for the burning simple urges.
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Wants and needs the ever star studded night,
To beat on down and prepare for true flight.
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These are my favourite lines; for two reasons...firstly, the image/idea is just so simple and intriguing and true...but mostly, because they are indicative of a larger feature of this poem: your immaculate and incredibly assured handling of the language.
I love your work Lorna...you know I do...but this is taking it to a whole new level!!
The imagery is simple and cosmic and beautiful; the feelings behind them, behind the whole piece, are elegantly and wonderfully stated.
I tip my hat to you, Ms. Caizley!!
J xxx
'Hanging just like perfections sweetest dream.'
wow, is that ever a magical expression, L. truly a very inspiring poem...I was totally into this one it has a ethereal tone, had me smiling instantly lifting me, thanks....an all together lovely dose of poetic joy...terrific stuff, poet
thank you Christopher, I'm glad you liked, your comments are very much apprenticed :) x
Mr Brown!!....your comments are so very kind, thank you so very much I truly appreciate your lovely words xxx :)
Hi Lorna A lovely piece the imagery
gives a sense of A new start leaving
the past in the past, to touch the stars once more
just my thoughts as i read
Enjoyed! Great write
Best wishes Debs xx
Ahh Debs, I really appreciate your kind words, thank you. Xx
A beautiful piece of writing
I quickly connected to and
enjoyed all the lines,
when in
your life you started to write?
Enjoyed!
Best from Jai:)
Thank you Jai, I'm glad you liked it..I've been writing from being young but only recently decided to post online as I am still learning!!
Thanks again
Lorna x
A flamboyant interpretation of fresh starts interspersed with gorgeous imagery.
This shows what a capable poet you are. Lovely piece.
Take care, x :)
Thanks Richard, you always have such lovely comments, I really appreciate it.
Thank you
Lorna x
:) Thank you for sharing !
Hug. x
A truly beautiful Sonnet Lorna......Delightful read !
Mick.
Thanks Mick I'm so glad you enjoyed it x
My Dear Lorna,
The glistening stars illuminate her smiling face
For she has now found true love
She senses it's passion shine
Brightening the bleak earth
With her bared soul now claimed forever
She floats to the stars
To share eternity with her "Soul's Mate"
Hugs, Peace and Love,
Larry xxx
My dearest Larry,
Your poem is a very beautiful interpretation. Thank you!
I truly appreciate the time spent on your lovley words.
All my love to you and yours
Lorna
Xx