That Woebegone Wail
Oh, hear the locomotive's lonesome wail?
It speaks to me of lost loves and sad regret.
I shun sadness, alas, to no avail
its whistle sings of sins I canโt abet.
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In darkest night, it seems to call to me
recounting all the many wrongs Iโve done.
I hide my eyes from sorrows deadly scree
and realize, for now, anguish has won.
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Although, there are some nights my spirits soar,
to dip and sail above doomโs dreary din.
Itโs then I know my life is so much moreโ
than lamenting things I cannot change nor win.
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When locomotives lonesome whistles wail,
I stand steadfast and know I shall not fail.
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I love this Sonnet, Dean, it's so deeply beautiful. I love the comments, Merrill left above. he said it well. Hugs!
Yes, Merrill has been very supportive since the first day I arrived here at Cosmo, Kerry.
I deeply appreciate your generous support and kind comments as well.
Hugs!
~Deanย :)
Oh my fellow Poe lover how I enjoy your sweet ink of never more! Always enjoy your ink bro
Thank you very much, Greg.
I sincerely appreciate that.
Take care, bro.
~Deanย :)
Fantastic structure, the language here is penned excellently. I thoroughly enjoyed this piece.
Thanks again for taking time away from your writing to reading my work, my friend.
As always, I am very grateful to you for doing so and I'm really pleased that you enjoyed the sonnet.
With gratitude,
~Dean
This sonnet Dean
has terrificย
depth and mood.ย
Well expressed!ย
ย ย Kind Regards Jai:))ย
Thanks, as always, for your kind and generous support, Jai.
I very much appreciate it!
Warmest wishes,
~Dean
We are so concerned with the past -- perhaps we should me more concerned with how long things are going to last. Enjoyed your work.
I couldn't agree with you more, Terry.
Thanks so much for the R&R. I appreciate you sharing your thoughts with me on this one!
Take care,
~Dean
Excellent work SIR KUCH!!......reminds me VERY much of THOMAS HOOD ~ one of my favorite poets!!.......PINNED this that I might refer to again!!......LOVE & ROCKETS!!......T xo ???
Thank you very much first and foremost for reading my sonnet, Tony.
I deeply appreciate your generous support and stellar comments.
All my best to you & yours, my friend.
~Dean Kuch ?????????
Superb work Dean! ย You inspire with your mastery! ย Your use of language, imagination, and execution is awe inspiring to me! โบ
Thank you very much for reading, John.
I've found that we each discover inspiration in some of the unlikeliest of places.
I appreciate your glowing comments, my friend.
All my best,
~Dean
Masterfully written Dean;
-I really like the structuring of the sonnet as it was well composed in the technical structureย and storytelling format of a sonnet.
-I felt the feeling, from this sonnet, of the time I saw a movie were a cut of hand kept on following its owner. The constant fear of something lurking in the shadows. Could be almost anythingย that's coming after you.
-But then your rebuttal quatrain and third verse shows that there are larger sides at night, that's probably when the whistle doesn't blow or that you're feeling better and even if it does blow your above it.
-And it's because of this rebuttal verse which makes up your couplet of hope, "I shall not failโฆ.." A well-rounded sonnet that covers thee complete structure and format of writing one and it is exceptionally done here.
-one little tweak is in your first line the fourth wordย which is the word and syllable (THE) is stressed. no biggie.
Take care and have a good oneย especially with all those that love you dearly.
Alex
Hi Dean.ย Of course you know I love your sonnets.ย This one speaks of love and that is a wonderful thing to still know how to get to that space.ย As I read this one, the images of what you are saying filled my mind like a fog mist walking through feeling the cool textures of words in my mind and heart.ย Nice one my friend. xx d
Thanks so much for checking it out, Deb.
Congratulations on receiving a nomination for the poetry contest here for this month as well.
I wish you the very best of luck, darlin'
~Dean ;)
This seems to be along the line of Shelley or Keats,
dark, ย with deep layers of thought,
you have a talent, this one cannot deny,
i look forward to reading more of your poems in the future,
aspire to be
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Thanks so much for reading and for the kind comments as well, Aspire to be.
All are deeply appreciated.
Shelly or Keats, wow! That's some great company.
Hugs!
~Deanย :}