Poem -
The Bridge
Longest bridge between two contrasting worlds,
Selfless and selfishly they are combined.
Over sweet conditioned, such heartfelt find,
Hold close a maternal touch that is furled.
Virtue and perplexity in design,
Lets leap the deepest waters with much ease.
Listen to only cooling scented breeze,
Clasp at the ticking clock, it has no time.
Welcoming all delight the bridge it brings
Sturdy as it does feel, yet fragile still.
Like trampling the greenest pastures hill,
Though either side a different hymn it sings.
Eventually the water will subside
Closing the gap, without the heavy tide
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Comments
Despite the concrete images here, you turn them in such a way as to evoke an ephemeral tone. It creates a very distinct picture of the bridge and the two vastly contrasting worlds at opposite sides thereof. There's such a sense of longing coming from both sides of that bridge...but; unlike most poems of longing: there is hope of that longing being fulfilled. Which is why I love the final couplet (quoted).
An accomplished work from a poet finding her very powerful voice.
Oh...and I adore the image you've used here too.
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Thanks Jason, I always love your comments on my work, they really brighten my day!...Yes the bridge fills the gap between primitive need and longing desire....the poet will have both...eventually!
Love Lorna
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Hi Lorna...The picture you used is very beautiful and your words makes the picture comes alive in one's mind...beautifully written...Enjoyed every word of this piece..
Thanks Rose, I'm very glad you enjoyed this...I love surrealist imagery and this one felt fitting
Lorna
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Poems on bridging divides are quite common on Cosmofunnel. Your take on this topic is done from a clear perspective and formulated with fine terminology.
Your poetry is decisive and sets an agenda which stimulates the reader. This is both artistic and entertaining in nature, constructed in a refined way. Such fayre as this shows the creative and inquisitive aspects of your character !
Great piece, finished with an eye for detail. Love your work !
Warmest wishes. xox
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Thank you so much Richard, I really appreciate your supportive comments, I keep trying to perfect my wording as I find getting to grips with meter a little difficult.
Hope your well and warmest wishes to you too
Lorna xx
The only way to get better at anything is to keep doing it ! The improvement comes naturally with practice. You are such a talent ! Thank you for sharing your works !
Wishing you the very best as always.
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Hey MISS CAIZLEY!!.......your choices on subject matter are uniquely your own......I there have been many attempts at pieces comverning bridges.......bit you've created a dichotomy here .......it almost feels as thouqh you're speaking of "Separate Realities" in places......VERY clever writing here........your VOICE is finding foundation.......a pleasure to behold......ALL STARS!!.......LOVE and ROCKETS!!.........T xo ?✳✴☀♥
Hi Tony, Yes your spot on in your interpretation, two separate realities, a bit of an insight into my life at the moment between being a mother and a new distant love in my life. I always appreciate your feedback.
Thank you
Lorna
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Excellent
thanks lorris
Love it.....all smiles
Thanks Lorris x