Poem -

This house

This house

They are ghosts now,
Consigned  to  history 
In this house 
Whose walls
Once loved.
Gone is the laughter 
Which tickled  the  air 
And danced on through
To the twilight hours.
There is nothing  now 
Except the memories 
Lingering
In the dustlight.
And high among the cobwebs
In the corner,
Love lies barely breathing.

 

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Tony Taylor

Wow!! This is VERY well conceived and BEAUTIFULLY delivered.....I Love the tone you've created here..... the memories linger perfectly within your VERY well crafted phrasing!!......ALL STARS!!..... well done B.M!!....and...in case no one has said so......WELCOME to COSMO!!!......LOVE & ROCKETS!!.......T xo. : )

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Being Me

Thank you so much, Tony. That is very kind. I will be honest, this is, infact a return to Cosmo from me. I've not been away too long but looking on here it seems like an eternity. Hope you're well x

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Jill Tait

You are wonderful writer my friend xxx

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Being Me

Thankyou so much for your kind comment! I love writing x

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Jill Tait

Me too i am totally addicted!!! ❤️💙❤️

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Being Me

It gets you like that!  x

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Jill Tait

Yes doesn’t it ❤️💙❤️

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Cherie Leigh

Hi Being Me....Funny how a place, a scent, a scene, can bring back memories when all is lost....and a house can hold so many....Well done...xo ;)

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Being Me

Hi Cherie...thank you so much for your wonderful comment. I really appreciate you taking the time to read this little poem. A house can, indeed, hold many memories 😀 x

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Tony Owen

Hi Being Me. A beautiful write that captures the loneliness of abandonment perfectly. I must say, you are a very talented writer indeed.

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Being Me

I am totally humbled by your opinion 🙊  Truth is, like all of us here on Cosmo, I just like writing which came from my love of reading poetry. I am so happy that you totally 'got' the loneliness and abandonment theme that this poem was about. Thank you very much for reading and leaving such an awesome comment x

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Being Me

Hi D.b...  thank you sooo much for popping by and reading. Thank you, too, for the stars you gave to both my little poems. In this comment you have mentioned the line that is also my favourite. You are a poet of great calibre and I am honoured by your words x  🌷

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I  read this several times and then I'll leave it because it's the kind of writing that would past through the very fibers of my wounded soul..

I'm  happy you're here to share your beautiful talent with us..⚘⚘

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Leah Cabael Yodico

Short but beautifully written.
Welcome to Cosmo 
and congratulations on the nomination.

😏

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Tracey Goundrill

Oh wow, I love it when a poem speaks so loudly to me from the page. This is a beautiful, poignant piece of writing. You are incredibly talented. Thank you for publishing this x 

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Being Me

Gosh, wow, what a lovely comment! I am happy that you enjoyed reading it 😀 and that it spoke to you from the page. Thank you so much for reading and commenting...and thank you for the pin x

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Gerard McGowan

I couldn't begin to imagine a home without my beautiful daughter, she fills the air with love and innocence, her bumps and bruses, her tears and laughter, all of her is what makes home a home.

Amazing poem " being me", you have captured something amazing, well deserved nomination and definitely a winner.

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Being Me

A house is a home with family!

The house in the poem was empty as the couple had split and the kids had all grown and flown the nest.

Thank you very much for reading and leaving such an awesome comment. I am glad you liked it x

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Being Me

Hi Amber, thank you so much for reading, I really appreciate it. And thank you, too, for the comment x

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lodigiana

You have created a wonderful piece full of  lonely melancholic memories, a joy to read ! A worthy nomination indeed!  Lodigiana xx

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Being Me

Thank you so much for your lovely comment! I am really happy that you liked the poem. Bless you and thank you x

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Richard Waters

" It is being so happy, that keeps you going ! "
Still, if it is in the name of " art ".....how, can it be wrong ?
Look to more, for inspiration. " Reach, for the stars ! "
Find peace, in the " tran- quill " pool !
You, diversify to get the most out of it. Life.
" Be happy. " Do not be, sorry.  :)
 

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Being Me

Hi Richard, I agree with you; being happy does keep you going.

Thank you for reading and commenting and also for the vote. I appreciate it 😁 x

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Nigel Cresswell

One of the finest poems I have ever read on this site. This is truly deserving of the win. 
I look forward to following your future work. 
Nigel 

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Being Me

Wow, Nigel! That is the BEST comment ever! Your own nominated poem is outstanding (I remember reading it). Thank you... thank you... thank you 🙏 I am so glad you like this poem. Thank you for reading and leaving such an overwhelming positive comment... It has really made my day... And thank you again x

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Liz Campbell

 I held my breath all the way through in anticipation of how it would end. So beautifully crafted. A masterpiece!! 💟

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Being Me

Thank you so much for your kind words, Liz. I do truly appreciate you taking the time to read and comment. I am glad you like it. Keep yourself safe and well in these frightening times x 

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GREG TUCKER

I wrote one like this a while back but I have to say this was more creative 

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Being Me

Thankyou so much Greg!  What was your poem called? I will have to have a read...although I think I have possibly read it...but I read so much that I could be mistaken so I will pop over yo your page later and see if I can find it x

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