Time (version 2)
Passing seconds, hours, days all inclined
Rotating closer still, but far too far
The ticking of the clock, its beats in time
Anticipation, what's already mine
Just waiting for the time to be on par
Passing seconds, hours, days all inclined
Awaiting all cogs and coils to unwind
Tender moments captured upon the breeze
The ticking of the clock, its beats in time
Manifest in a little tasteful chime
The Images of you, which often freeze
Each second, hour, day are more inclined
Waiting is worthy of its golden find
Frustration hates to wait for what's in store
That ticking clock (it always) beats in time
The chain upon the pendulum it swings
Until the day that we develop wings
Passing seconds, hours, days all inclined
The ticking of the clock, its beats in time
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Always a pleasure reading your work ....thank you Lorna
Thanks Lorris xx
I had to read the part two after reading the first part...I'm glad I did...Beautifully written...
Thanks again Rose, I couldn't decide which one I liked so I decided to post both
Lorna xx
You're right to post both, because really...I couldn't choose between them either.
We have wings already, my love...wings of words. And when those fail us; though they rarely do: we have the wings of airplanes...and the wings of our dear friend, Sarah, Plane & Tall!!!
There's something truly wonderful about seeing a fine poet come into her own and find her voice...a voice with which she will sing to the world. It's particularly wonderful when that poet is also a person you love deeply.
On a personal note: thank you so much for your love and support through my recent ordeal. My heart has been healed...now it only races at your smile, your laugh and your touch...and on reading your life-affirming poetry.
J XxXxXxXxXxXx
I'm glad your feeling better darling,
I wish I could have done more while you were ill, but I'll be their soon :)
You have done so much for me over the past few months and I can never thank you enough my love.
Lorna
xXxXx
Splendid write which shows you are diligent in differing approaches to maximise effect !!
Another considered work with that touch which raises a write above the norm.
Warmest wishes. X
Thank you Richard, I am so pleased you like this one, your kind words really brighten my my day
Lorna
xx
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The second version seems more personal intimate. Brilliant write.
Thanks Lost, I really appreciate your comments
Lorna x
My Dear Lorna,
.
The sands of time are ticking
Each morsel one day less
As the wounds of life we're licking
That brings us mortal stress
.
Then comes the day we leave our bodies
To travel the Universe
Until again we find that somebody
To eternal our love disperse
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Hugs, Peace and Love,
Larry xxx
My dear Larry,
this is really lovely, thank you so much
Love
Lorna xx
Hey MISS CAIZLEY!!......this is a song .......it sings in its elegant delivery...... and I seriously could hear music for this......... love the bent in direction here......... the pic reminds me of Salvador Dali!!........fistful-O-stars!!........high fives girlfriend!!.......... smiles........T xo ?✳✴☀
Thanks Tony, yes the image reminded me of Mr Dali too, thank you so much for you comments, I can't imagine it as a song, but I'm glad you can!!
Thanks again
Lorna
Xx
Lorna, caught up with your version 2 and glad to have made the journey.
They both work more than well in what you have to say and boy oh boy can you write a poem!
Love and longing wrapped in the hands of time.
Deftly done and thanks again Lorna :) xx.
Hi Shaun, I've no Idea how many times I'm going to say thank you but....thank you!
I really do appreciate your lovley comments...I hope you have a good time away and hopfully I'll have somthing new to have a "gander" at when you return
take care
Lorna x