Poem -
Wavedance
Lace waves lap tender shore
Brush away layered sand
Erode this sodden land
Revealing something raw
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A hypnotic deep trance
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Horizon shrouded day
Clouds tumbling away
As the salty waves dance
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As the salty waves dance
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Comments
Short, simple...and yet you paint two elemental images in the mind which convey something profound.
You've been doing this a lot lately...and frankly...
I love it! ... and you.
your Jason XxXxXxXx
Hi Sweetheart, It makes me happy that you enjoy what I write and I'm glad you like this one :)
I love you too
Your Lorna
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'as the salty waves dance' yes, superb choice to repeat that line...you have great poetic instincts...the poem goes past 'reason' to pure emotion, perhaps a perfect moment captured....so many ways to 'read' this one, your work is mesmerizing the reader, exceptional poetry....suddenly I realize that I can't just 'hand out' stars in this moronic 'star' rating system, lol....not after reading poetry like this, (I know, 'we are all 'artists' and it's not a competition') that would be hypocritical....totally awesome poem, poet, cheersΒ
Hi Christoper, Thank you so much for your kind words, Im so happy you enjoyed it and im glad you can see the deeper intention of my poetry, I hope like you say can be read in many waysΒ
Lorna
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Lovely poem, enjoyed
thank you, im glad you liked it :)
Hey LORNA!!....I agree with Chris about you having great poetic instincts..... because not every writer would have found the heart of that rhythmically & succinctly delivered "Wavedance" of yours ......and used repetition as the icing..... it's a beautiful and thoughtfully conveyed piece of poetic purity...LOVE IT!!......ALL STARS!!.....PINNED!!......LOVE and ROCKETS!!......T xo ?β³β΄β
Hi Tony, Thank you so much for your words and your pin it means a lot to me. I am so glad you enjoyed this one, I liked the repetition as I felt it brought something more to this...I'm happy it came across well.
Lorna
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Beautifully composed a pleasure to read.
WATER, AND LIGHT. " Shadows, and dust. " What, lingers in the heart, takes, " us ", on a journey. Gives to us, within life, the means to express and impress. In, all those souls, is the " reflection, upon a dream " !! :)
CREATION, EVOLUTION, and associated " yearning ", and "Β learning ", makes the difference. Within, us, are the concepts and contexts....to hold dear all we have, and all we can be. The " wavedance " involves, SOUL AND SPIRIT. It, involves, the NEED TO BE......someone, doing something, to bring forth REALITIES and CERTAINTIES. That, is comfort. That, is joy. That, is the way of, it. The " meaning " has to be uncovered, to find what it is, which drives us forward, leaving there no doubt as to what we represent.
Thanks, for giving. So much. Here.
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