Poem -
Insomniac
Deepest dark night
It always twitches
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3am with might
The hourly witches
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4am it's light
That need switches
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5am the slight
Of sleep itches
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6am no fright
Head in ditches
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7am alarm-plight
In need of stitches
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8am to flight
It's Morning bitches
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Ha!! I love that last line.
The whole poem is an effective kaleidoscopic glance into the insomniac's mind; and despite its simplicity, there's a rather sophisticated progression from that first 'twitch' (the first intimation that it's going to be one of those nights), through the whole gamut of just not being able to sleep.
Bravo, my darling!!
J XxXxXxXxXxXxXx
Thank you sweetheart,
Im glad you enjoyed it, I had a rough nights sleep last night with an almost hourly wake ....then ages to fall back each time.... Alas, its not all bad...It got a little inspiration :)
Love
Lorna
xxxxxx
There is an attractive edge to your poetry which means it tackles topics from interesting perspectives.
Not a great sleeper I was drawn to this ! It is very well structured as is all your work and has that indefinable quality which shows what an artistic bent you have.
Keep 'em coming ! Love reading your creations.
xx :)
Hi Richard,
I am always a little taken back by your comments..and this time is no different...thank.you so much, I really value your encouragement
Lorna
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:) I only say it as I see it !
Your poetry is rewarding to read. Keep up the great work !
Take care. xXx
Thank you..it means a lot :) x
:) x
Brilliant
Thanks Lost,
Much appreciated
Lorna
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Join the club Lorna ## I'm afraid, I'm with might the hourly witches lol ## very entertaining ink ##
Hugs and kisses
Leah
Thanks Leah, glad you enjoyed it xx
Great stitches
Thanks Michelle,
Lorna x
Hey MISS CAIZLEY!!........I love how you're experimenting with ALL the possibilities available to the poet......... genuinely seeking the fringe.........fistful-O-stars!!.......LOVE this!!.......LOVE and ROCKETS!!........T xo. ?☀✴✳
Thanks Tony,
I am experimenting, i haven't found a firm favourite yet...but i'm sure I will
Lorna
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My Dear Lorna,
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In wee hours of night
We meet demons of darkness
Our Id and Ego
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Hugs, Peace and Love,
Larry xxx
Hi Larry,
Id and ego night
superego is suppressed
The Freudian games
Love
Lorna
Xx
My Dear Lorna,
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Adler is jealous
We must play his games instead
Sorry Mister Freud
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Hugs, Peace and Love,
Larry xxx
Very creative and beautiful...You summed up insomnia real well...
Thanks Rose, sleepless nights are such a pain :)
I really value your comments
Thanks again
Lorna xxx
I love this format
the poem feels deep and thus I value
well written Lorna
luv from Jai:)
Thanks Jai, your words mean a lot. Thank you so much for taking the time to comment. I really appreciate it
Lorna
Xx
Blooming well done and said Lorna and talk about getting into an insomniac's mind.
For you really nailed it with this write, for those sleepless nights are a real pain.
I'll be up all night thinking about while trying to get to sleep, still, can always count sheep. Last time I counted to 29,762!!! Bummer!
Great to read your older posts my friend and thanking you most kindly : )x.
Back tomorrow night for more journeying back.👍
Hahaha....well try not to get lost on your journey
I dont even remember what on earth I've written...so good luck
thank you, for your lovley comments
they're much appreciated
Lorna xx
👍.