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The Last Visit

The Last Visit

There's a cottage on an island in a Loch, 
Soot blackened, crumbling, forlorn, aloft;
Where the heather grows up near waist high
And the sun bleeds out over endless sky, 
Where a moment can last forever 
And where the eagles fly. 
And I swear I hear you calling out my name 
As I row the gentle waves across the Loch; 
And I'm sure I feel your breath upon my neck 
In the little wooden boat that slowly rocks. 
T'was a time gone by, another life ago, 
When we had seeded all our hopes to grow
And allowed our dreams to stack;
Dream upon dream along life's planned track, 
But never did we think
That God would snatch you back. 
And I swear I hear you calling out my name
As I look back across the water past the rocks, 
Where the ghosts of all my yesterdays remain
In the cottage
On that island
In the Loch. 

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Jill Tait

 Very dreamy & nice write xx

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Being Me

Thank you, Jill. Glad you like it x

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Cherie Leigh

Great imagery using the row boat and looking back at memories...revisiting the past....i enjoyed. xo :)

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Being Me

Thank you so much for reading Cherie. I'm glad you like this x

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Being Me

Thank you Greg!  That is really kind of you to say. Thanks for reading x

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Marion Price

What a truly stunning write my friend...you took me 'there'...I thankyou for that ...pinned 💕

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Being Me

Thank you so much for your lovely comment. I really appreciate you taking the time to read it. And I feel honoured that you pinned this, thank you x

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wow! This is a stunning piece, the visuals seem roll across my mind in a film like journey , a past love , carefully placed in your memory. You left my heart hungering for more.....💜

I love this🌺🌹

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Being Me

Awww...my awesome friend, thank you, that is such a lovely comment. I am so happy that you could see the images rolling out like a film. I am honoured that you like this little poem. Thank you sooo much for reading. And thank you too for the pin ⚘🌹x

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Gerard McGowan

I'm in awe, 

and the sun bleeds out over endless sky

just brilliant and so sad, a poem we humans all relate to, I weep for you, I weep for the dead and I cry that I'm left behind.

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Being Me

Hi Gerard... Thank you so much for your lovely comment. I am glad you think that as humans we can all relate to it. I love to write things as a little poetic story... To take the mind somewhere else for a short while. The line you picked out is my favourite too... As I was writing, I saw the sun setting (in my head of course) through that vast sky and those words seemed to describe it the best.

Oh, and FYI... People who are left behind do the most good. In my mind, I see THEM as the chosen ones, for they have the most important job of all to do. And that is putting right all the wrong that humans have done and setting the record straight (God is a stickler for that) before they go to heaven. 😉

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Larry Ran

Our Dear Being Me,

Each lovely line, as one reads this amazing work, is like a snowball rolling down a hill, getting larger with every turn.  I give you a Haiku in return.

Lost loves tear my heart
For they never leave my Soul
Our bond eternal

All our love,
Linda and Larry xxx

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Being Me

That is an amazing Haiku!  Thank you so much...I am honoured to receive such a beautiful reply. I am so glad that you like this poem. Thank you so much for taking the time to read and reply. Love to you both x 💐

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Richard Waters

Dramatic. Passionate. Transference of feeling, and emotions, created from the resonance of the terrain with its unique quality, pleasingly, upon the heart, and soul.
In the midst of such harmonious compilations, conveying spirit and message, you discover, more. That, is sure !
What a " genesis " of theraputic connection, blended with truth, and the spells cast by promises surrendered, due to change. Direct from sensation, qualified by magical interpretation.
Truly, a lesson. In love.
Thank-you. For, this.  :) 

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Being Me

Hi Richard. Wow, what an awesome comment! Thank you so much for your in depth analysis of this poem. You have truly grasped the essence of this and I am so glad that you like it.  I thank you for taking this the time to read this and once again I thank you for your comments x  🌺

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Being Me

Aww thank you Greg! I really appreciate you reading and leaving a lovely comment. I am glad that you like it. Many thanks x🌹

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ROWLAND PAUL HILL

A beautiful place; a beautiful memory of a loved one and a beautiful poem.

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Being Me

Thank you so much! I really appreciate you reading and commenting. I'm glad you liked it x

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Gwendoline

This reads like a chapter into someone's soul. The boat on the water, that sense of loss and feeling lost. The grief which leaves them drifting, forever looking back. Such a dreamy, eerie write. I loved every word x

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Being Me

What a lovely comment! I am so happy that you "got" the feel of this in its entirety and that you liked it. Thank you, my friend, for reading and for leaving such an insightful comment. I truly, truly appreciate it. And thank you too for the pin! You're a star x

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Gwendoline

You are most very welcome, such a wonderful read x 

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Chris Bond

A stunning write , beautifully written , heart wrenchingly sad x

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Being Me

Thank you so much for reading, Chris, I really appreciate it.  I am so glad you like it. Thank you,too, for your very kind words x

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Syd

Brilliant imagery, very well written. This poem is definitely well rounded in every sense. Both telling a story and immersing the reader in the scene.

I look forward to reading more from you. Talented  - Syd 

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Being Me

Aww Syd, thankyou for stopping by and reading. I am so happy that you enjoyed reading this poem. You are very kind and generous in your comments and I thank you. I enjoy writing this kind of stuff and I appreciate you taking the time to read  it. Keep yourself safe and well x

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Being Me

Thank you, so much  😊  That is what I was trying to get across x

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Pratibha Savani

Such a beautiful sad narrative. It's a brilliant read. I love your story telling in such an atmospheric way that the reader is glued til the end. I can see now why you wrote a novel. 😘 Px

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Being Me

Pratibha, I am so sorry I have taken so long to respond to your lovely and amazing comments. Thank you so much for reading! I am pleased you enjoyed this poem. Thank you again 💐 x

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