The Last Visit
There's a cottage on an island in a Loch,Β
Soot blackened, crumbling, forlorn, aloft;
Where the heather grows up near waist high
And the sun bleeds out over endless sky,Β
Where a moment can last foreverΒ
And where the eagles fly.Β
And I swear I hear you calling out my nameΒ
As I row the gentle waves across the Loch;Β
And I'm sure I feel your breath upon my neckΒ
In the little wooden boat that slowly rocks.Β
T'was a time gone by, another life ago,Β
When we had seeded all our hopes to grow
And allowed our dreams to stack;
Dream upon dream along life's planned track,Β
But never did we think
That God would snatch you back.Β
And I swear I hear you calling out my name
As I look back across the water past the rocks,Β
Where the ghosts of all my yesterdays remain
In the cottage
On that island
In the Loch.Β
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Comments
Β Very dreamy & nice write xx
Thank you, Jill. Glad you like it x
This is so gorgeous.Β Love the imagery
Thank you Greg!Β That is really kind of you to say. Thanks for reading x
What a truly stunning write my friend...you took me 'there'...I thankyou for that ...pinned ?
Thank you so much for your lovely comment. I really appreciate you taking the time to read it. And I feel honoured that you pinned this, thank you x
I'm in awe,Β
just brilliant and so sad, a poem we humans all relate to, I weep for you, I weep for the dead and I cry that I'm left behind.
Hi Gerard... Thank you so much for your lovely comment. I am glad you think that as humans we can all relate to it. I love to write things as a little poetic story... To take the mind somewhere else for a short while. The line you picked out is my favourite too... As I was writing, I saw the sun setting (in my head of course) through that vast sky and those words seemed to describe it the best.
Oh, and FYI... People who are left behind do the most good. In my mind, I see THEM as the chosen ones, for they have the most important job of all to do. And that is putting right all the wrong that humans have done and setting the record straight (God is a stickler for that) before they go to heaven. ?
Our Dear Being Me,
Each lovely line, as one reads this amazing work, is like a snowball rolling down a hill, getting larger with every turn.Β I give you a Haiku in return.
Lost loves tear my heart
For they never leave my Soul
Our bond eternal
All our love,
Linda and Larry xxx
That is an amazing Haiku!Β Thank you so much...I am honoured to receive such a beautiful reply. I am so glad that you like this poem. Thank you so much for taking the time to read and reply. Love to you both x ?
Dramatic. Passionate. Transference of feeling, and emotions, created from the resonance of the terrain with its unique quality, pleasingly, upon the heart, and soul.
In the midst of such harmonious compilations, conveying spirit and message, you discover, more. That, is sure !
What a " genesis " of theraputic connection, blended with truth, and the spells cast by promises surrendered, due to change. Direct from sensation, qualified by magical interpretation.
Truly, a lesson. In love.
Thank-you. For, this.Β :)Β
Hi Richard. Wow, what an awesome comment! Thank you so much for your in depth analysis of this poem. You have truly grasped the essence of this and I am so glad that you like it.Β I thank you for taking this the time to read this and once again I thank you for your comments xΒ ?
wonderful poem
Aww thank you Greg! I really appreciate you reading and leaving a lovely comment. I am glad that you like it. Many thanks x?
A beautiful place; a beautiful memory of a loved one and a beautiful poem.
Thank you so much! I really appreciate you reading and commenting. I'm glad you liked it x
This reads like a chapter into someone's soul. The boat on the water, that sense of loss and feeling lost. The grief which leaves them drifting, forever looking back. Such a dreamy, eerie write. I loved every word x
What a lovely comment! I am so happy that you "got" the feel of this in its entirety and that you liked it. Thank you, my friend, for reading and for leaving such an insightful comment. I truly, truly appreciate it. And thank you too for the pin! You're a star x
You are most very welcome, such a wonderful read xΒ
A stunning write , beautifully written , heart wrenchingly sad x
Thank you so much for reading, Chris, I really appreciate it.Β I am so glad you like it. Thank you,too, for your very kind words x
Brilliant imagery, very well written. This poem is definitely well rounded in every sense. Both telling a story and immersing the reader in the scene.
I look forward to reading more from you. TalentedΒ - SydΒ
Aww Syd, thankyou for stopping by and reading. I am so happy that you enjoyed reading this poem. You are very kind and generous in your comments and I thank you. I enjoy writing this kind of stuff and I appreciate you taking the time to readΒ it. Keep yourself safe and well x
forlorn and oh so hauntingly beautiful.
Thank you, so muchΒ ?Β That is what I was trying to get across x
Such a beautiful sad narrative. It's a brilliant read. I love your story telling in such an atmospheric way that the reader is glued til the end. I can see now why you wrote a novel. ? Px
Pratibha, I am so sorry I have taken so long to respond to your lovely and amazing comments. Thank you so much for reading! I am pleased you enjoyed this poem. Thank you again ? x
Tina another superb poem and so despondently haunting, a real sense of being alone with nothing to hold onto and look back except memories.
Love the way you conveyed everything so hopelessly of hopes and dreams lie shattered and soulfully in equal measure.
A gemstone of a poem that we all can relate to if we're honest, at sometime in our lives and a love sadly lost.
Superbly well written and touchingΒ and so glad to have found it.
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Hi Shaun...I am so very, very sorry that I have not seen your comment until now. Please forgive my horrendously late reply.
Thank you for reading. I cannot tell you how much I appreciate the support - thank you does not seem adequate. But I do thank you and I thank you ENORMOUSLY. I am really pleased you like this poem. Thank you soooo much for reading and for commenting...and also for the pin x
The truth of the matter at hand, is that this poem of yours Tina is hauntingly good and I sincerely hope that my opinion as stated is not just seen as some old or corny cliche .. but actually does reflect my objective view of it ..Β
All Good Things & much respect ....................... Neville x
Thankyou Neville! I feel very honoured that you trawled all the way back here to read. Thankyou very, very much. Glad you liked it x
Always a pleasure & always mine .. x