The lost girl
A fragile rose, with petals torn,
Her delicate form, forever sworn.
Scars adorn her skin like lace,
Each one a story, she cannot erase.
Eyes haunted by memories, she cannot shed,
Ghosts of a childhood, she wishes were dead.
Mental scars, a burden to bear,
A life consumed by darkness and fear.
Alone in this world, with no guiding hand,
Loneliness her only constant companion.
No true friends or family to call her own,
Just echoes of pain, she has forever known.
A lost girl, adrift in a sea of despair,
Scared of each wave, scared of every care.
Life itself a daunting, treacherous road,
With demons and monsters, that plague her abode.
Yet beneath the thorns, a blossom still grows,
A resilient spirit, that ebbs and flows.
For even the darkest of nights must wane,
And somewhere a dawn will break through the pain.
Though the path seems long and the battle's not over,
This lost girl will find she's a powerful sover.
With courage and strength, she'll conquer her fears,
And emerge from the shadows that she's dwelled in for years.
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What I really like about your poems is that you start with you in a bad place (sorry that's not the best way to express it) but as the poem moves on you find redemption. As I have said in other comments this is a feeling with which I am all too familiar and, like you, it led me to poetry. "No true friends or family to call her own." That line really hit home for me. Your rhymes are good, the language you use is good and what I will say, from personal experience, is that the times you went through were like a nightmare but they have been instrumental in producing the you of today. Stay strong.Â
hello arianna im sorry for your struggles, loved your poem a lot, heapsÂ
if its chill to make a suggestion, and im sorry if i stuffed upÂ
A lost girl adrift, in a sea of despair,
Scared of each wave, of every care.
dont know ask bernie if its better with the second scared removed
I think there are arguments for both points of view here. Let me just say I am flattered you mentioned me. Now that's out of the way you make a valid point. I have always been told that repetition is to be avoided but I also feel that, with the subject matter of this poem, the repetition to emphasise the emotion is effective. Hope that helps.Â
Thankyou so much I really appreciate your feedback I would definitely agree with Bernie it works both ways. Thankyou again xx