Poem -
The Scorching Sky
The sun it’s rays, they scorch the skin
Warming through winter's deep blue.
Intense heat, felt even within
Perspiration beads drip true.
The melting touch lightly kisses,
Burning light of pure wonder.
Away from the dark abyss is
A closeness to much thunder.
Illuminate the bolting sky,
With forks of mightiest wrath.
Saturation of earthly dry
Following down the present path
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There's a world; a life, perhaps: in transition here. This poem exists at the ecotone; that clash between one ecosystem and another: and the imagery, in all its wonderful juxtapositions and contradictions reflects that.
There is turmoil and conflict...but the seeds of hope are already long established in the opening lines...and in "The sun it's rays..."
I particularly adore the contradictory imagery ... and...
...frankly, is a masterstroke image!! It makes no real, literal sense...but I just KNOW what you mean...I can see it!...and it's beautiful!!!
Marvellous!!!
J xxx
You have such an exceptional way of reaching the very depth of what I want to say Jason . You are so very motivational and give so much positive feedback to me and many others on here. I feel truly happy that you enjoy my work. Thank you!
Love
Lorna xxx
It's a pleasure...Ms. Caizley.
J xxx
Hey Miss CAIZLEY!!....a magical piece......hard to comment after that amazing feedback from Jason.......The imagery here is VERY powerful......I felt swept away into what Jason called the juxtaposed ecosystems you created here so beautifully.......there's an enigmatic quality to this write that I found truly compelling.......your poetry has a uniqueness in its delivery that is yours alone.......ALL STARS!!......loved it!!......well done sweet poetess!!.....LOVE and ROCKETS!!....T xo ?☀✴✳
Thank you Tony, i really love this site, everyone is so positive, it feels like such a safe place to write. Thank you again, I am stunned by the comments and truly appreciate them
Love
Lorna xx
I really enjoy reading all your write ?!! XOXO
Thank you Leah, I really appreciate your kinds words
Lorna xx
Lovely poem
Thank you so much xx
Beautiful poetry....enjoyed the read....thank you Lorna
glad you enjoyed this Lorris, Thank you xx
Lovely write Lorna....I really enjoyed reading it...
Thanks rose xx ?
My Dear Lorna,
The sunlit ceiling ensconces us
Brings warmth to our past chill
A darkened sky now illuminates
With a bold and thunderous thrill
Hugs, Peace and Love,
Larry xxx
Dear Larry
That bold and thunderous thrill
Rumbles at the highest peak
Higher than the highest hill
Till sunshine from clouds does leak
Love and hugs to you and yours
Lorna xx
My Dear Lorna,
Thank you so much for your beautiful words in answer to my replies on your three lovely poems.
The thunder abates
It brought tremors to her heart
The sunshine appears
Hugs, Peace and Love,
Larry xxx
Hi Larry,
you are very kind.. Thank you for all of your lovely words!!
My dearest Larry
Your kindness shines outwardly
Leaving sunlight here!!
Lorna xx
Lorna, terrific poetry, and I must say that I had to step away from the 'entity' and see if it followed me, and sure enough it did, the poem makes me feel good, like the sun makes me feel good in summer on that perfect afternoon and makes me appreciate the moment, knowing somehow that it will stay stored in my memory for times and times and the dividing of times; a long time....you are an interesting poet who captures moments and articulates them so very well, and I picked the last line as a pull quote, just because of that invitation to the positive 'present tense feeling'; I like that a lot; always there when you need it most, very cool....I really appreciate your poetic perspective and great talent, Lorna... cheers poet
'Following down the present path'
Hi Christopher,..Yes your interpretation is very indepth and on point!!...It's about looking at a more optimistic future...the whole piece is a contrast of ups and downs, dark and light...... I am a taken aback by your comments and I am so pleased you like my poetry!! I enjoy yours very much too.
Thank you for your comments, I really appreciate them
Lorna xx