Poem -
The Shuttered Turret
for my Lorna
Your first words uttered were, “Are we insane?”
for stealing conversations in the night
Which led to quiet kisses in the rain
Those kisses (deeper still) brought us to life.
The sweet convulsing ache of joyous need
was borne on wings of hot unspoken words
Though words (spoke or unspoken) cannot feed
a blood-filled chalice with a broken sword.
Shy meetings (smiling) on the winding stair
Your form, in cobalt ~ mine, ungentle mail
The shutters of our turret still the air
But in confinement ~ still, we see no gaol.
Obsidian crowns the apex of that tower
Where we are locked within the poet’s bower.
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Thank you sweetheart, I love it!! Xxx
Just wait till you see the actual painting!!
XxXx
So excited xxx
Geez Louise!!.......this is an incredible display of the ability to choose the precise words to move any reader of poetry....... Love poems are, in my humble opinion, a most difficult undertaking because there are so many of them...... crossing nearly everyone's path at some point in their lives........BUT.......they become easier for the poet in "True Love"....... and they read like magic when delivered by a true wordsmith......... and EVERYONE can recognize it when it glows like this outstanding piece!!......... this was an honor to read.......I mean who doesn't Love a GREAT Love poem!?........ Bravo........ God bless you JASON!!....... PINNED for sweet perfection!!.....LOVE and ROCKETS!!.......T xo
Tony...
You're absolutely right; love poems are very difficult to crack. It's not easy to walk that tightrope of genuine sentiment and (at times, overpowering) emotion and not fall into cliche and cheap sentimentality. The proposition is all the more difficult when the recipient is a damn fine poet herself (you, of all people, know this to be true!!).
Thank you so much for your kindness and support.
J ;)
The old school romanticism to your writing is wonderful to read. Great writing
Thanks.
J ;)
Hi  J  Beautiful love poem Such a romantic
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Great piece a pleasure to readÂ
Best wishes Debs x
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Thanks Debs.
Go glad you enjoyed it.
J x
My Dear Friend Jason,
.
In the shelter of his bower
He sates her every need
With gentility and power
Her hunger does he feed
.
As his she also fills up
They cradle in each others arms
Drinking wine from sterling silver cups
Immersed in all their charms
.
Peace and Love,
Larry xxx
Larry, my dear friend...
My apologies for the delayed response.
You have an unerring ability to see that which is (at least) partially veiled in poetic obscurity and bring it into the light with verse of simple and elegant clarity; I think that it's this ability which makes you the Haiku Master you undoubtedly are.
Thank you for this delightful comment, my beloved friend.
your friend & fan,
J ;)
Hey J...What I love most about your writes (all of them) is your choice of words...When it comes to phrasing with originality no one does it better....Love is magical...It's a delight to read love poems when it comes from the heart like this does...I'm glad I caught this one....You and Lorna?...I love it!!!
My dear sweet Rose,
You're absolutely right..."Love is magical"!! Love; or lack thereof: is one of our main reasons for writing poetry...which is why sites like this...and people like you and me...will always be busy!!!
Thank you so much...your support and appreciation mean a great deal to me.
J x
Enjoyed......thank you....all smiles
Miles of smiles to you too, my friend.
J ;)
Just wow. Your talent is incredible.Â
Soothes the heart like a beautiful painting.