Poem -
Wake Up
These shards sink in hard, they twist my flesh and remind me of all the things I now detest in this life.
Vanity driven, flamboyant in nature, you nestle me with plastic kisses which leave no trace of love.
I decide to accept you are blind
I have found this world forces the eyes to reside on a faceless mankind
While in time, we dwell on what feels like hell. I crawl back into my shell and wait...
wait for you to take the bait...and awake
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such a sad and wondrous write. thank you for sharing.
Thanks so much for reading, liking and the vote. So pleased you enjoyed reading this piece :)
Dear poet sister GWENDOLINE!!
I haven't read you before...... I'll make a point of reading you now...... this is a truly powerful and VERY well crafted piece of poetic prose (my favorite style)...... with phrasing that paints beautifully within the minds-eye of the reader...... rhyming within the lines and at their ends is clever and works perfectly here~
~ "I have found this world
Forces the eyes to reside
On a faceless mankind..."
A striking phrase that forces the reader to think and to appreciate.......ALL STARS!! & PINNED!!...... well done..... and..... in case no one has said so.......WELCOME to COSMO!!.......LOVE & ROCKETS!!.......T xo. : )
Hello Tony,
Thanks so very much for the warm welcome and the attentive comment on my piece today. I don’t tend to stick to a style, but I am so pleased you enjoyed this one. I will have to read some of your work. I do enjoy reading other people’s poems, as much as I enjoy writing my own. I loved hearing your thoughts on my piece, thanks ever so much for kindly liking, pinning and voting. Made my day :-)
You know, there are some people incapable of being able to "love." For people like that "love" is merely a need to make themselves feel good. Once upon a time I loved a person like that. I stupidly thought that my life would be enough for us both. He said the right things...when he felt he had to...but at the end of the day actions always speak the truth words hide. So these days I save my love for those that love me. I learnt this the hard way.
Another really good write from you x
Aw BM there are some cold hearts out there sadly. I have bumped into one before now. Like you, I have learnt the value of what love means. The expression of love isn’t just words in a sentiment. It is driven by a person's true actions towards you. How they value the person you truly are, warts and all. Am glad that person is in your past and hope love is one that brings you a happy future for many years to come ?
Thanks for reading this poem and apologies for the late reply, I have not been online x
WONDERFUL POEM!!!!!!!
Thank you so much Greg :) sorry for the late reply, I have not been online. Thanks for the vote and like too. So glad you liked it x
CALL ? Of, the wild ? Or, the wilderness ? Years, thrown OPEN to aspersion ? Within, the " cosmic " rays of hopeful promises, set inside the " pathway, defining time, to express " care-free " description of, remedial " therapy " !
In the " GAME " of chance is found, want or desire. For, far more than the " alarm " bells, of, fanciful connection. To, the plain, inspiring " existing " and incentivized notions, of future developments, bordering on progressive visionary " formations " ! Beyond, art, or, practical needs. Do, you not realize ? Potential ? Or, potency ? X :)
Hello Richard, your attentive comment and indeed thought-provoking words are so fine-tuned and creative enough to be published as their own pieces on here. I thank you for taking the time to not only read my work but for penning in such a fine way as to leave the author deep in reflection x)
Reflect, on, this. " THE HEART OF THE MATTER. " Is, there room to breath away from the necessity ? Or, the spontaneous ? In, life, you find BALANCE. Between, the slips, and, the grips. Of, suggested or conceived realism. By, current formulas. Away, from physicality, but, sometimes including, it. About, the place. And, using space. To, define " YOU " ! :)
such imagery. I can see the song " it must have been love" by the roxettes in the imagery. very gud set of words that paint pain anxiety wanting love in true colours
Hello Evrod, I am so sorry I am only replying now. I have been away poorly. Roxette I know so well and it is a sad song too. I can see why this popped into your head and take that as a huge compliment
thank you for reading my piece and for the wonderful comment
Gwen
amazing words. Translate it into Arabic.
استيقظ
تغرق هذه الشظايا بقوة ، فهي تلوي جسدي وتذكرني بكل الأشياء التي أكرهها الآن في هذه الحياة.
مدفوعة بالغرور ، ملتهبة في طبيعتها ، تعانقني بالقبلات البلاستيكية التي لا تترك أي أثر للحب.
أقرر قبولك أعمى
لقد وجدت أن هذا العالم يجبر العيون على الإقامة في وجه البشرية التي لا وجه لها
بينما في الوقت المناسب ، نتحدث عن ما يشبه الجحيم. أعود إلى صدفي وانتظر ...
ننتظر منك أن تأخذ الطعم ... وتستيقظ
I shared it on facebook
Hello Anwer, sorry my reply is late. I have been poorly. Wow I am flattered and thank you for making my poem available for others to read
you are so kind
Gwen
Bravo on such a masterpiece! Effortlessly crafted
Hello Simon, so sorry this is late I have been poorly. Chuffed you liked this poem and thank you for such a wonderful and supportive comment
Gwen
Crazy good, no wonder you got so much awesome feedback on this one, simply awesome poetry Gwen!
Hello Max, thank you for taking time to look at one of my older poems. So glad you liked it. Hope you are enjoying writing too, can’t wait to read more of you :)
Gwen
Ahhh, I just posted! Once a week eh? Besides heaps busy right now with the competition!! But really enjoying reading your work ;)
Gwen some so called people in life can be so cold and calculating and makes one's blood boil.
Met so many over the years and see their behaviour with those with them and how they address themselves. Spare me!
Vanity, ignorance and huge ego's wrapped up in one low moral fibre package.
Your powerful poem delivers the shameful goods on said people.
You tell it how it is for love and life can be hard on everyone and also trust .
To trust a person and then be deceived hurts the most.
I wish you well my friend and thanks for writing food for thought.x.
And Gwen I wish the 5 stars function would wake up.
Thank you my lovely friend. Your words echo my piece perfectly. As ever you are so very perceptive. Many thanks for reading my works and leaving me your wonderful thoughts. And yes the Cosmo doesn’t like us leaving five stars or pinning at times. But thank you for wanting to :)