Poem -
When next I wake
(a golden oldie - slightly adapted to 'modern' standards)
Late at at night, sometimes,when I wake
to an early truck, or perhaps nothing,
I turn to you.
A faint smile betrays
a dream of a warm home,
shelter from storm
in frozen winter nights.
Your breath whispers
of a bright, red fire in the hearth
and - beyopnd the window -
Betelgeuse
mirrors your dream.
Your arms embrace this dream
and you yourself become galaxy,
one with the universe,
to me you become precious stone
hidden in the rock.
When next I wake,
it is to your smile.
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Comments
Lovely lines John.
Thank you, especially since I have learned so much about writing poetry in the last 33 years (though the 'you' in the poem is still my much beloved wife 😇)
You know, this poem was a unique experience to me. From the first lines I really thought I was actually there! Like I was watching ffg B a video rather than reading. Truly amazing. TFOTS
Thank you for liking this to a video, meaning it has so much life (which it has for me😁), but ... err ... I am not well versed in modern abbreviations, so could you please translate ffg B and TFOTS for me, on the net I found too many different possibilities (I was born in The Age of Stonehenge - I always say to the youths at the office to explain my ignorance 🤣🤣🤣🤣
Haha, sorry John! it looks likes this one was a spelling mistake on my behalf. Now that I read over your poem again does kinda remind me th song daylight by Maroon 5 but your poetry is unique so its only what it reminding me of not an clear reflection of it. I was trying to say that it reads like I'm watchin TV or a movie with the level of detail and everything, very clever. Sorry for the confusion! Should always check my comments before checking send...not your fault, completely mine. Kind regards. TFOTS
I had gotten the idea that it reads like watching the telly, so that came across quite well. My basic problem is that I am simply too old to know about all slang/urban abbreviations, so I have no clue what TFOTS exactly means - all I can find is They fucking totally on the side - which makes no sense to me... More fool me, probably.